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Band 3.5

Prevention is better than cure – researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?

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There is no denying the fact that prevention is more important than treatment .
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that
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time
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 is better than going to
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 to get treatment .
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 an argument that opposes it. In my opinion,
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doing
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 the gym or the garden is much better than only
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 treatment or taking
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medication
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 by investing in your health
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will reduce the
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 to the clinic.
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, most of the
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 patient who is visted the doctor
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running
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 will cost less by not
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 the hospital .
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, Research shows that most
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 who did training and breathing
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visted
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medication only.
Antoher
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the lifestyle
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people and enjoy the
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,
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 with friends can make you dicplane .
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 improve your body
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 you the weakness you have. In conclusion, despite people having different views,
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 believe that prevention is much better than
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treatment
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 medication or
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 on the
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 diagnosis .

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Answer the full question more clearly. Say how much you agree, and keep this clear in all parts.
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Add one clear main idea in each body part, then explain it more.
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Use an example that is more real and easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one job only: intro, body 1, body 2, conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple way with words like first, also, for example, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the one before it.
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You gave a clear opinion in the intro and the end.
coherence and cohesion
You used paragraphing, which helps the reader follow your ideas.
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You tried to give examples to support your points.
Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proactive
  • preventive measures
  • lifestyle diseases
  • public health
  • healthcare expenditure
  • cost-effective
  • chronic conditions
  • early detection
  • immunization
  • health promotion
  • risk factors
  • non-communicable diseases
  • disease surveillance
  • preventive diagnostics
  • health literacy
  • universal healthcare
  • primary prevention
  • secondary prevention
  • tertiary prevention
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