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The bar chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the last year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart illustrates the estimated percentages of illiterate males and females across six regions worldwide for the previous year.
Overall
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, the data
shows
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show
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 that
women
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 experienced higher illiteracy
rates
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 than
men
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 in every region, with the largest differences found in developing areas. South Asia reported the highest
rates
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, with around 35% of
men
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 and 55% of
women
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 unable to read or write.
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, the Arab States and Sub-Saharan Africa exhibited significant gender gaps, where roughly 50% of
women
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 were illiterate compared to about 30% of
men
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.
In contrast
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, East Asia and Oceania had lower
rates
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, with approximately 7% of
men
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 and 20% of
women
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 lacking literacy skills. Latin America and the Caribbean presented more moderate figures, with both genders below 15%. Developed countries had the lowest illiteracy
rates
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overall
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, with minimal gender differences, both remaining under 5%. In summary, South Asia, the Arab States, and Sub-Saharan Africa showed the highest illiteracy levels, with
women
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 consistently more affected than
men
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women, rates, men with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Illiteracy rates
  • Region
  • Gender disparity
  • Bar chart
  • Estimated
  • Summarise
  • Main features
  • Comparisons
  • Analyzing
  • Discrepancies
  • Significant
  • Pronounced
  • Speculation
  • Male
  • Female
  • Global perspective
  • Literacy
  • Educational attainment
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Cultural influences
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