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The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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social anxiety
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individuals
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normally
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Answer the main question more clearly. Say early if advantages are bigger or disadvantages are bigger, and keep this view all through the essay.
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Add more clear ideas on both sides. You talk more about bad points, so the good side needs more detail or you should clearly say the bad side is stronger.
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Use one or two simple real examples to support your points, like family far away or a student who spends too much time online.
coherence and cohesion
Make each paragraph have one main idea only. This will make your writing easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words carefully, like first, also, however, because, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check sentence stops. Many ideas are joined in very long sentences, so the reader can get lost.
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You clearly write about the topic of social media and face-to-face talk.
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You include both good points and bad points, which helps answer the question.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, a body, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is mostly natural: reason, good side, then bad side.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interaction
  • geographical barriers
  • global community
  • cultural diversity
  • economic opportunities
  • superficial interactions
  • mental health impact
  • loneliness
  • depression
  • interpersonal relationships
  • real world
  • spread of misinformation
  • echo chambers
  • societal polarization
  • informed citizenship
  • constant connectivity
  • maintain relationships
  • fast and efficient
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