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Many parents put pressure on their children to get high grades in school. Many people think this is a great idea and others think it is not a good idea. Give reasons why parents do this and do you think this is a positive idea or a negative idea.

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Nawadays many
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students
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 graduate from high school.Some
students
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 get high greeds and others get lower.Some views see that the
parents
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 play a huge role in their children’s
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greed
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 others
see it
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do
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 not.
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both
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views have a significant point. In general,
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 any pressure on
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anyone
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 cannot helps any one to achieve their goals
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,
there
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 is a case just with
parents
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 and their
kids
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kids,
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be
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 a positive idea.Some
students
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 feel better when their
parents
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took
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talk
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 to them.
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 is going to increase their grades.
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,when
parents
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 tell their children to study
hard
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hard,
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this
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 might be an important
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, but it has a lot of disadvantages because
students
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 cannot know what is better for them. On the other
hands
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, liveing student without pressure
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 really nice
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because
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about because
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student
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students
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 will feel more
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 can control themselves,
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this
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 will make their life has balance between joy and school.But in
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parents
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 should control their children wisely . In short,
put
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putting pressure on students
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students
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 in pressure is like a coin.It has
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side
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 and
bad
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a bad
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side
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.I see that we must benefit from the good
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 and avoid the bad
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task response
Answer both parts more clearly: say why parents do this, and say clearly if you think it is good or bad.
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Give one or two simple reasons for parents, like they want a good future or fear failure.
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Add one real example to support your idea.
coherence and cohesion
Make each body paragraph about one main idea only.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple link words well, like first, also, however, and in short.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects to the one before it.
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You give your opinion in the essay.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction and a short ending.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has clear paragraphs.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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