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Modern technology is now very common in most place of work. how do you think this had changed the way we work? Do you think there are disadvantages to relying too much on technology?

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In the modern generation
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technology
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, technology
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 has become a vital thing in every work
enviroment
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environment
. Some people think that tech made things a lot
more
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easier than
before
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before,
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while
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 others believe that there's no
necessarity becuase
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necessity because
 it
make
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makes
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 the workers less efficient.
in
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this
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be discuss the benifets
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discuss the benefits and
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also
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backsides
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downsides
 in our modern
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society
. Digital
tools
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has
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have
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 always been a game changer when it comes to work
one
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 of the examples it could help individuals like Accountants to insert there Accounts very
corectly
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correctly
 using our modern
tools
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Same
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 goes with
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Applictations,
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 you can do it online without the need to go to the company. Let's go back in time before Digtial
tools
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invention evreything
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. Everything
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 was much
diffuclt
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more difficult
 as evrething was depinding on papers but now things are much easier
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compared
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 to twenty years
from now
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ago
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. The downside that the community always talk about is making the workers less efficient
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, and
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 the reason for
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technology
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almost
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has almost
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 did evrething for them
but
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, but
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 the fact is
yes
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, yes
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 Digital
tools
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 could do many things
but
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, but
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 it doesn't make the workers less productive
it's
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; it's
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 the oppsite
it's make
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it makes
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 them more efficient
in
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In conclusion
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counclusion,
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 modern
technology
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 made the work
enviroment
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environment
 a lot
more
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apply
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easier and less stressful. In my personal prespictive i belieive that modern
technology
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 is vital for our modern generation
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, and it could also
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also
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 it could ameliorate the quality of our production

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task response
Answer both parts more fully. Say clearly how technology changed work, and then explain the bad side in a clear way.
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Give one or two clear examples for each main idea. This will make your points stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Keep your main ideas easy to follow. Put one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words in a better way, like first, also, however, and in conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence connects well to the next one so the reader does not get lost.
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You answered both questions and gave your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
You included an introduction and a conclusion.
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You used an example about accountants and online applications.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
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