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Band 4.5

Access to clean water is a basic human right. Therefore every home should have a water supply that is provided free of charge. Do you agree or disagree?

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I disagree with the idea
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that
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a
water
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 supply should not be completely free to access for every home.
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even with the support from the government, the
water
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suppliers
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 utility firms still need to make
profit
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 to maintain their companies. If the
water
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suppliers
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 do not have enough cash to run their businesses, they would try to reduce the cost
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 every manufacturing supply and infrastructure process.
This
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 situation may reduce quantity and efficiency in the manufacturing supply process and lead to
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a decline
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 the
overall
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water
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 quantity.
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, it would incur the
deduction maintainance
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maintenance
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 of the facilities undermine facility maintenance , which may result in more system and infrastructure breakdowns occurring. Another concern is about how corruption might influence
lower income
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lower-income
 staff, luring them or the managers to make money illegally from the cash deposit of the company.
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, in the aspect of the
water
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suppliers
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, providing free
water
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 supply is not beneficial for them, and the negative consequences would
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 diffuse to the customers, who would suffer
as a consequence
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from
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 the outcome.
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fee
water
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 supply may have a negative side effect for
people
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, making them not value and save
water
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 supplies. When the
water
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 usage is closely related to the charge, it would let
people
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 learn and focus on how much
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 they
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 in daily life.
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, if they don’t need to pay the
water
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 bill of the
water
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 anymore, they may lose appreciation of the value and worth of their daily
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 usage, causing the waste of the
water
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 resource. Because
people
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 often care about their self-interest most, they would be encouraged and pushed not to waste
water
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 and
utilize
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 the resources more reasonably if they are charged of the
water
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 supply. Ultimately, the
people
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 would
also
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 be harmed
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 the waste of
water
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 supplies, causing
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water
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a water
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 shortage. In summary, offering
water
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 without any payment does not fit the practical situation, regardless of
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suppliers
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the suppliers
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,
water
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 as a resource, or the citizens.
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, I oppose the perspective that the
water
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 supply should be free for every household.

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task response
For task response, your answer is clear and you stay on one side. But your ideas need more full support. Add one real or simple example in each body part.
task response
For task response, some points are too general. Explain more how free water could cause these results, step by step.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, your essay has a clear start, two body parts, and an end. This is good. But some sentences are too long and hard to follow. Make them shorter.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, some linking is not smooth. Use simple links like First, Second, For example, As a result, and In summary.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, keep one main idea in each paragraph. In body 1, focus only on cost and service. The point about corruption feels less connected.
task response
You answer the question clearly and say you disagree from the start.
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You give two main reasons for your view: company cost and water waste.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear paragraph plan with introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You use basic linking words like First, Second, Therefore, and In summary.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • basic
  • human
  • right
  • water
  • supply
  • provided
  • free
  • charge
  • agree
  • disagree
  • health
  • essential
  • sick
  • diseases
  • supports
  • education
  • children
  • focus
  • learning
  • searching
  • better
  • futures
  • reduce
  • poverty
  • families
  • save
  • money
  • spend
  • important
  • needs
  • promote
  • equality
  • chance
  • access
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