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Some people think that mobile phones should be banned in schools because they distract students. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some
people
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 think that mobile
phones
Use synonyms
 should be banned in
schools
Use synonyms
 because they distract
students
Use synonyms
. To what
extent
Use synonyms
 do you agree or disagree? Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that mobile
phones
Use synonyms
 should be banned in
schools
Use synonyms
 because they distract
students
Use synonyms
. To what
extent
Use synonyms
 do you agree or disagree? Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that mobile
phones
Use synonyms
 should be banned in
schools
Use synonyms
 because they distract
students
Use synonyms
. To what
extent
Use synonyms
 do you agree or disagree? Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that mobile
phones
Use synonyms
 should be banned in
schools
Use synonyms
 because they distract
students
Use synonyms
. To what
extent
Use synonyms
 do you agree or disagree? Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that mobile
phones
Use synonyms
 should be banned in
schools
Use synonyms
 because they distract
students
Use synonyms
. To what
extent
Use synonyms
 do you agree or disagree? Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that mobile
phones
Use synonyms
 should be banned in
schools
Use synonyms
 because they distract
students
Use synonyms
. To what
extent
Use synonyms
 do you agree or disagree? Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that mobile
phones
Use synonyms
 should be banned in
schools
Use synonyms
 because they distract
students
Use synonyms
. To what
extent
Use synonyms
 do you agree or disagree? Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that mobile
phones
Use synonyms
 should be banned in
schools
Use synonyms
 because they distract
students
Use synonyms
. To what
extent
Use synonyms
 do you agree or disagree? Some
people
Use synonyms
 think that mobile
phones
Use synonyms
 should be banned in
schools
Use synonyms
 because they distract
students
Use synonyms
. To what
extent
Use synonyms
 do you agree or disagree?

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task response
Write a real essay, not only the topic again and again.
task response
Give your opinion in the first part and keep it clear.
task response
Add 2 or 3 main ideas and explain each one.
coherence and cohesion
Use one intro, two body parts, and one end.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like and, but, so, because.
coherence and cohesion
Support each main point with a small example.
task response
You copied the topic correctly, so the subject is clear.
coherence and cohesion
The key words stay the same, so there is some word link.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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