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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line graph illustrates the
percentage
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 of the population in 4 different countries living in cities from 1970 to
proposed
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apply
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2040.
Overall
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, the figures of Malaysia and Indonesia followed a continuing upward
trends
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trend
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, and they are
ecpected
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expected
 to increase by 2040. In the case of
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 and Thailand, the figures fluctuated slightly, but they are
also
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predictied
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predicted
 to climb by 2030 and 2040. First of all, the proportion of the population living in Malaysia grew rapidly, especially
the
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during the
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 period of 1990 to 2010, the rate grew almost 30
percentage
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 points in 20 years. As the forecast, it will climb
gentally
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gently
 and reach its peak at 80
percent
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per cent
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 by 2040. In the case of Indonesia, the figure was the lowest in four countries,
roughly accounted for
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accounting for roughly
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 14
pecent
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per cent
.
Nervertheless
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Nevertheless
, it increased since 1970, and overtook Thailand in 2000 and
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 in 2010. It is expected
become
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to become
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 the second largest proportion by 2040.
Secondly
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, the figure of
Philippines
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 varied between 1970 and 2010. It increased 20
percentage
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 points from 1970 to 1990, and decreased 10
percentage
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 points from 1990 to 2010. The prediction shows that the population living in cities in
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Philippines
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the Philippines
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 will grow and reach back at 50
percent
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per cent
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.
On the other hand
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, the
percentage
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 of Thailand declined slightly from 1990 to 2000. It
then
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 remained steady from 2000 to 2020, and it is forecast that it will surge by 2030 and 2040.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, philippines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Urbanization
  • Demographics
  • Trend analysis
  • Predictive models
  • Population distribution
  • Percentage change
  • Statistical comparison
  • Growth rate
  • Anomaly
  • Migration
  • Economic development
  • Baseline
  • Continuations
  • Urban population
  • Decline
  • Fluctuation
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