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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the future
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people
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, people
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 will use personal
cars
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, public transport and trucks as passengers, as
technology
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the technology
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 of
ai driven
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AI-driven
cars
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are
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is
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 becoming popular and robots are replacing human drivers.
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,
this
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 trend has several disadvantages
,
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 I believe that
advantages
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the advantages
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 outweigh all drawbacks. On the one hand, driverless transports are safe and do not break the rules.
People
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 are prone to make mistakes,
while
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 artificial intelligence's
algorithm
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algorithms
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 do not
let to
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allow for
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 failure. Humans often break the law and drive
in
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at
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 high speed, drunk
or
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, or
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 cross roadcross under red light, comparely robot will follow all rules.
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, the number of car accidents and person deaths will be reduced.
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,
cars
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 that are already equipped with
ai
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AI
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 can stop
car
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the car
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 instantly as soon as
object
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an object
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 appears. I think
this
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 benefit is expected to save millions of lives.
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, there must be
notices
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apply
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some negative sides
of
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to the
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 trend. Nowadays
the large number of
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, a large number of people
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people
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 are work as taxi, bus or truck
driver
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drivers
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. After fully integration of automotion into
transports
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transport
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, professional drivers will face
with
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the
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 problem of unemployment. They will not be able to find new job places, as they will not have enough
qualifaction
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qualifications
 for another job.
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, today many
people
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 are lonely
depend
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and depend
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 on income from their job as
driver
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a driver
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. If they
will
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lose their work, economic consequences will impact everyone. In conclusion,
although
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large
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a large
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amount
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number
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 of
people
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 will lose
work places
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workplaces
due to
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 modern automated technologies, I believe that ai drive
cars
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 will reduce
number
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the number
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 of crashes and accidents on the roads and will result less human deaths.

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Make your main answer more clear in the first paragraph. Say directly why the good points are stronger than the bad points.
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Add one more clear bad point, or explain the bad point more. This will make your ideas more full.
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Use examples that are more exact and easy to follow. This will make your support stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like 'first', 'also', 'however', and 'as a result'.
coherence and cohesion
Check that each sentence clearly connects to the one before it.
coherence and cohesion
Put one main idea in each paragraph and explain it fully before you move on.
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You answer the question and give a clear opinion.
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You write about both good and bad sides.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear opening, body paragraphs, and ending.
coherence and cohesion
The paragraph order is easy to follow.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • driverless vehicles
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • increased safety
  • reduced traffic congestion
  • improved efficiency
  • accessibility
  • disabled
  • elderly
  • job displacement
  • privacy concerns
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