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the table below show the percentage in different academic and employment statisticks for three Canadian universities.

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The given table provides information about different academic and
employment
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 statistics for three Canadian universities ,
such
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 as Brandon, Seadford and Harrison. The given data is measured in percentages.
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,
it is clear that
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 the highest figure was recorded by the
employment
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rate
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 for collegians,
while
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 the
lectures
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 with
PhD
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qualifications
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 represented the lowest
rate
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. Observing in detail, there is a small difference between the percentage of
lectures
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 with
PhD
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qualifications
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 and
lectures
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 given high
rate
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, accounting for 30 and 40, respectively. The
rate
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 of students who complete lessons made up 80,
whereas
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 the
employment
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rate
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 of collegians constituted 72 in Brandon. Turning to the Seadford, the figure for
lectures
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 with
PhD
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qualifications
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 and given
high
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rate
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 is represented almostby asimilar index, making up 50 and 45, respectively. The
rate
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 of student complete lessons showed 70,
while
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 the
employment
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 collegian represented 78. Looking at the percentage of the Harrisons, the lowest
rate
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 was represented by
lectures
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 with
PhD
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qualifications
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. The figure for
lectures
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 given high
rate
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 was 50. There is a small difference between the
rate
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 of students who complete lessons and the
employment
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rate
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 of collegians, constituting 78 and 82, respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words employment, rate, lectures, phd, qualifications with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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