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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart compares the
amount
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number
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 of households in the US by their annual
salary
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 between
in
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apply
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2007, 2011 and 2015.
It is clear that
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 the public in the US saw the biggest rises
salary
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$1000000
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of $1000000
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 or more in 2015
but
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, but
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 the lowest group of recieved
salary
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$750000
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of $750000
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 to $99999 over the
9 year
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9-year
 period. In 2007, the households
who
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that
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 were $100000 or more recieved
salary
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around
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of around
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 28
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millions
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million
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, which
was
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apply
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dramatically
rise
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rose
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 to 34
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millions
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million
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 in 2015.
Also
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, the household who were acquired
salary
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less
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of less
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 than 250000
which
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, which
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was
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apply
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slightly
soars
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soared
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 from 25
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millions
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million
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 to 28
millions
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 in 2007
to
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and
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 2011. The following 4
year were slight fell
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years fell slightly
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 to 26
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millions
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million
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.
While
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 $25000- $49999 rise by a similar amount
around
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, around
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 30
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millions
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million
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 in 2011.
Overing
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Over
 the following eight
year
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years
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,
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however
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however,
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 the households in the US group
of
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received salaries of
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 recieved
salary
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 $50000 - $74999 and $ 75000- $99999 were remain steadily, 22
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millions
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million
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 and approximately 15 million
respectively
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, respectively
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words salary, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rises" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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