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Many countries face the problem of low voter turnout in their democratic elections. What are the problems associated with this and what can be done to remedy it?

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In recent times, it has become
interestingly
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increasingly
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 common for many
countries
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 to face the issue of low
voter
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turnout
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 in their democratic election.
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 there are clear reasons for
this
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 situation, the
government
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 can take measures to address it. There are several compelling
causes
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reasons
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 why more and more people are facing the problem of low
voter
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turnout
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 in many
countries
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.
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, with the rise of
urbanization
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,
along with
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lack
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the lack
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manual
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of manual
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 machines
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 of electric ones, the
government
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 has established many
fabrics
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factories
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, companies and industries, which
has
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 contributed to consuming more
energy
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 to produce something and use something. Given these circumstances, it comes as no surprise that the population of the city are struggling with low
voter
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turnout
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 in many
countries
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.
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, another reason would be related to the lack of
power
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 plants around the city,
along with
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 the number of
energy
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 consumers.
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, many industries and fabrics,
along with
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inhabitants
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inhabitants,
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 can
utilize
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utilise
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energy
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 for their basic needs from one
power
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 station.
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, the country can face the problem of
an
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apply
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efficient
power
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 distribution all around the world.
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,
although
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 many problems are mentioned above, there are some solutions to address them.
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, the
government
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 should focus on
construction
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the construction
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 of
fabrics
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factories
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 and industries around many cities
instead
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 of a
city
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single city
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. Thereby, that tendency can lead to improving
voter
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turnout
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 there, with the decrease
of
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in
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 the number of
energy
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 consumers. Another measurement to
this
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 situation can be related to increasing the number of
power
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 stations throughout cities
which
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, which
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 has significantly contributed to an efficient and high
power
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 distribution. In conclusion, even though low
voter
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turnout
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 in many
countries
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 can be attributed to several reasons, these issues can be solved by the
government
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.

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task response
Write about voter turnout only. Do not change the topic to power, energy, or factories.
task response
Answer both parts clearly: say what problems low voting causes, and then say what can fix it.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear main ideas in each body paragraph. One paragraph for problems, one paragraph for solutions.
task response
Support each main point with a simple and real example about voting, trust, or access.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas in a simple way with words like first, also, because, so, and however.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each sentence follows the one before it. Some ideas now do not connect well.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
You try to use paragraphing.
task response
You use some topic words like government and voter turnout.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • undermines the legitimacy
  • efficacy
  • voter apathy
  • disengagement
  • polarization
  • populist movements
  • embolden
  • dedicated supporters
  • skewing
  • fostering division
  • comprehensive campaigns
  • counteract
  • accessible voting methods
  • logistical challenges
  • civic engagement
  • civic duties
  • compulsory voting
  • penalties
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