some people claim that not enoughof the waste from home is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recyclings for governments to make it legal requirment. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle more of their waste.

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There is a claim that waste from
home
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is not recycled enough.
People
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believe that the way
of increasing
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recycling is
the
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help of
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government
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the government
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(introducing new
laws
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). I truly agree with
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view as it is one way of earning money
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saving
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environment
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the environment
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. Few
people
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would contest that
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wastes
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waste
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from homes
are
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is
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excessively increasing, making our
environment
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bad
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worse
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day after day. Foods are packaged with the use of cartons and plastics, but after eating these
goods
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people
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are
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just
throwing
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the packages away.
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, rubbish might be just
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disposed of
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,
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apply
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by
firing
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burning
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it, which increases the levels of CO2 emissions in our
environment
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. In order to solve
this
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problem
government
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can introduce new
laws
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about ways of recycling. By introducing these
laws
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government
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can encourage humans and
companies
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to recycle products.
People
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in Germany can be
great
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example; they are recycling products, without damaging the
environment
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(thanks to new
laws
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), after which new goods like clothes
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and
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bags are introduced. All the evidence suggests that recycled
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wastes
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waste
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from homes can be a
way
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source
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of profit. By adding those
laws
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government
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can encourage
companies
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to recycle
things
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like bottles, boxes, and other
different
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apply
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things
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, and
companies
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can make a profit by doing so. Large
companies
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in the USA,
for instance
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, are putting machines in the supermarkets, where
people
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can put their
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wastes
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waste
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and get checks with
certain
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a certain
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amount of money, which are given
according to
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their materials
, by
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. By
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doing so,
people
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can purchase
another
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other
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things
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in the supermarkets,
according to
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their preferences. It is probably true to say that after these
stages
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stages,
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companies
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can recycle
things
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and make
profit
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a profit
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. In conclusion,
although
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there are big amount of
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wastes
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waste
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nowadays,
this
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problem might be tackled by adding
laws
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by
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government
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the government
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, and these
laws
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might save our nature
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bringing
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additional profits to large
companies
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.

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task response
Answer the main question more directly. Say more clearly why laws are needed, and if they are the only way or not.
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Develop your ideas more. Some points are good, but they need fuller explanation.
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Use examples in a more exact way. Some examples are useful, but they feel too general.
coherence and cohesion
Make links between ideas smoother. Some sentences connect well, but some jumps are sudden.
coherence and cohesion
Group ideas more clearly. Keep one main idea in each paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Use simple linking words carefully, like first, also, so, and as a result.
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You answer the topic and give a clear opinion from the start.
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You use examples about Germany and the USA to support your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The order of ideas is mostly easy to follow.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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