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The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main points and make comparisons where relevant. The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in the total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.

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The given bar chart illustrates data regarding the proportion of renewable
energy
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 supply in 4 different
country
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countries
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 between 1997 and 2010.
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,
it is clear that
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 Iceland had the most
energy
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supplemen to compare
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supply compared to
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 other
counties
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.Another distinct feature is that Australia had the lowest
figyre
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figure
,
while
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sweden
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Sweden
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 showed
gradual
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a gradual
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 rise. Turning to the details ,in Australia,renewable
energy
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 accounted for
approximetly
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approximately
 9
percent
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per cent
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 of the total
enegy
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energy
 supply in 1997.
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this
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These
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 figures fell slightly to around 7% in 2000 and
then
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 decreased to around 5% in 2010. To continue with Sweden, the year 1997 experienced a slight fall in the proportion of
energy
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 supply
and
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, and
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then
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 it had a slight increase in
the
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2000, to around 5% and 6% respectively.
the
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energy
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 supply increased sharply in
the
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2010 with nearly 10%. In
details
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detail
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,Iceland recorded much higher
enegy
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energy
 supply
to compare
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compared to
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 other
country
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countries
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. It renewable
energy
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 share incresed steadily,
nearly
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by nearly
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 by 40% and 70% between 1997
to
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and
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 2010. In the turkey
enegy
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energy
 supply was nearly similar to each other during the whole period
with
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, with
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 around 30 and 40
accordingly
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compare" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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