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The table below gives information about the amount of beef exported in five different countries in 2011, 2014 and 2016.

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The table provides information on the quantities of
beef
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 exported by
Japan
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,
Switzerland
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,
Brazil
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, Norway, and Uruguay in 2011, 2014, and 2016, measured in
tonnes
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.
Overall
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,
Japan
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 and
Brazil
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 followed an upward trend; they exported more
beef
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 in 2016 than in 2012.
However
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, for
Switzerland
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, Norway, and Uruguay, the amount seems to fluctuate over these three years.
Beef
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 exports from
Japan
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 and
Brazil
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 rose significantly between 2012 and 2016.
According to
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 the table,
Japan
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 exported 224
tonnes
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 of
beef
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 in 2012; the
figure
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then
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 increased to roughly 310
tonnes
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 over the next 2 years. In 2016, it reached its peak at 1,005
tonnes
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. As for
Brazil
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, 125,465
tonnes
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 of
beef
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 were exported in 2012. In 2014, the
figure
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 climbed to 130,307
tonnes
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;
furthermore
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, it grew to 137,650
tonnes
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 in 2016. Turning to three other countries, the amount of
beef
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 exported by
Switzerland
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 was 23
tonnes
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 in 2012; it dropped slightly to 17
tonnes
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 in 2014,
then
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 rose again to 22
tonnes
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 in 2016. In the case of Norway, it sold 34
tonnes
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 of
beef
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 abroad in 2012. After 2 years, the quantities increased rapidly to 81
tonnes
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;
nevertheless
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, the
figure
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 decreased sharply to 17
tonnes
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 in 2016. Uruguay had a similar trend to
Switzerland
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; 44,372
tonnes
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 of
beef
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 were exported in 2012. The
figure
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then
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 declined gently first and grew to 42,310
tonnes
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 in 2016.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words beef, japan, switzerland, brazil, tonnes, figure with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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