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The table below gives information about the average annual spending of university students in 3 different countries

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The given table chart illustrates the information about the average yearly spending of university
students
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 in three
countries
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, A,
B
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, and
C
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 It is evident that the total spending in
country
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 A is higher than that in
countries
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B
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 and
C
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.
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,
students
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 in all
countries
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 spend the highest proportion on accommodation and food. Looking at the table in detail, one can see that
students
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 in
country
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 A spend the highest percentage of their budget, at 5000S$ in total. Compared with
countries
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B
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 and
C
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, their expenditure is about $4500 and $1500, respectively. In terms of accommodation, 45% is spent on
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 category in
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 A,
while
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 35% and 30% can be seen in
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B
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 and
C
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,
in order
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. Regarding food,
students
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 in
country
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C
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 paid their own cost account for 36%, go after it were 28% and 22% in
countries
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B
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 and
C
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. Leading to leisure,
country
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B
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 cost expenditure stands at the highest, at 23%. Meanwhile, it was clear that in
this
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 stable, one after
another
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 these figures about 22% and 12% belong to
countries
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 A and
C
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students, countries, b, c, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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