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Some people believe that people have the right to university education,and government should make it free no matter what their financialbackground. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many individuals argue that higher
education
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 should be available without tuition fees, regardless of a person’s financial situation. I agree with
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 opinion because equal access to
university
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 creates better opportunities and brings
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long-term
 benefits to society.
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 approach requires significant government spending, I believe its advantages are greater than the disadvantages. One important reason to support free
university
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education
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 is that high tuition fees can prevent talented students from continuing their studies. Academic potential is not connected to family income, but financial difficulties may reduce educational opportunities. If governments paid for
university
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 costs, admission would depend more on ability and motivation rather than economic background.
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, more young people could enter important professions
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 as medicine, engineering and
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, where skilled workers are needed.
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, funding higher
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 can contribute to economic development. Graduates usually have advanced knowledge and skills that help improve productivity and encourage innovation. They can create businesses, pay taxes and contribute to society in different ways.
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, money spent on universities should be considered an investment in the country’s future rather than only an expense.
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, completely free
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 may create financial pressure on
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. Authorities could have fewer resources for other important areas,
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 as healthcare or infrastructure.
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, I believe that supporting
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education
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 is a worthwhile decision because an educated workforce can provide greater benefits in
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. In conclusion, I agree that governments should make
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education
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 free regardless of financial background. Despite the costs involved,
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 policy promotes equal opportunities and helps develop a stronger society.

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Add one real or clear example in each body part to make your ideas stronger.
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Explain your main idea a little more, especially why free university helps the country in real life.
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Your position is clear, but the other side can be explained in a more balanced way before you reject it.
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Use linking words with more care. You use 'However' two times close together.
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Some sentences can connect more smoothly. Try to show how one idea leads to the next.
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Keep paragraph focus strong by giving one main point and then fully developing it.
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Your essay has a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.
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Your opinion is clear from the start and stays the same through the essay.
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Main points are relevant to the topic and easy to follow.
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Paragraphing is good and helps the reader understand your ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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