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You are selling your TV and you think your friend might be interested in buying it. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, you must write: 1.Why are you selling the TV 2.The specifications and price that you are quoting 3.Invite him/her over to your place so they can decide to buy the TV from you.

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Dear Sam, Hope
this
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 letter finds you in radiant health and in the best of spirits. I take
this
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 opportunity to
,
Punctuation problem
apply
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let you know that I am selling my
TV
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, as I am moving back to my home city. Yesterday, I remembered that
last
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time
Correct determiner usage
The last time
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 we met
you
Punctuation problem
, you
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 told me that you were looking to buy a new
TV
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. I know that you like to play games ,and you will love to know that my
TV
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 supports digital gaming and OTT video streaming. It is the latest smart
TV
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 model from the famous electronic manufacturer and have
multi
Correct word choice
multiple
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 network options like WIFI, Ethernet and USB. The same model I am selling would cost around 1300CAD for a new one ,but I can sell you my television for 400CAD.I think you can save good money on
this
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 deal. It would be my pleasure if you could visit my place, so that we can spend some quality time together and meanwhile you could take
look
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a look
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on
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at
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 television. Yours truly, s

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task response
Task response: You answer all 3 points, but add a bit more detail about the TV and why you must sell it now.
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Task response: Keep the tone warm and natural. Write to your friend like you speak to a friend.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a clear order: reason, details, and invite. This is good.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some lines are too long. Use shorter sentences and link words like 'also', 'so', and 'because'.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Check small word order and spacing problems, because they make the letter less smooth to read.
task response
Task response: You clearly say why you are selling the TV.
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Task response: You give useful specs and a clear price.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear opening, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The last paragraph invites your friend to come and see the TV, which fits the task well.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sell
  • friend
  • TV
  • phone
  • price
  • size
  • inch
  • screen
  • remote
  • stand
  • cable
  • HD
  • full
  • HD
  • smart
  • Wi‑Fi
  • ports
  • two
  • come
  • over
  • see
  • test
  • buy
  • time
  • today
  • soon
  • hope
  • well
  • please
  • invite
  • place
  • home
  • friendly
  • note
  • best
  • wishes
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