The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manuifactured. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given diagram shows the manufacturing process of
instant
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noodles
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from the raw flour stage to the packaging stage.
Overall
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, the
instant
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noodles
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manufacturing process involves
the
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a
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total
eight
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steps
by
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, by
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store into the storage silos and ending
at
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with
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the
ready made
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ready-made
instant
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doodle
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noodle
cups
which
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, which
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is
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are
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ready to
pack
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be packed
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and
distribute
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distributed
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to the market. At the first step of noodle production, the raw flour is poured from the truck to the silos and stored
into
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in
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the storage silos. After that, the flour is mixed with the mixture of oil and water
by
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apply
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using
mixer
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a mixer
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.
Consequently
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, the mixed paste is rolled by using a
numbers
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number
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of rollers to produce dough sheets with the required thickness. These dough sheets are
then
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cut into dough strips by cutting machines as per
designated
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the designated
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shape and size
and
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, and
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arrange them
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arranged
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into the
desire
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desired
proportion of noodle discs. The
noodles
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are cooked with oil and
dry
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dried
. After all the
noodles
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production and cooking steps are complete,
vegetable
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vegetables
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and spices are put into the cups
together with
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the cooked
instant
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noodles
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. At the final stage, labelling the noodle cups
are
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is
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done and
finally
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sealed
them
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apply
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words instant, noodles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Manufacturing process
  • Noodle dough
  • Steaming
  • Cutting
  • Dough sheeting
  • Molding
  • Air-drying
  • Frying
  • Seasoning
  • Quality control
  • Packaging
  • Shelf life
  • Flavoring agents
  • Texture
  • Instant meal
  • Convenience food
  • Production line
  • Consumer
  • Ingredient mixing
  • Safety standards
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