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More and more people want to buy famous brands of clothes, cars and other products. What are the reasons? Do you think this is a positive or negative outcome?

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Increasing
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An increasing
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 number of people are spending their
monay
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money
 to purchase branded clothing, automobiles and other
high
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high-end
end
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 products for their
day to day
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day-to-day
 and special occasion usage. In my
opinion
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 it
have
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has
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 considerable positive impacts.
To begin
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 with, it is in human nature to own
best
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the best
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 version of products, though
due to
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 financial and other
limitations
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limitations,
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 not
every one
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everyone
 can
offord
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afford
 to have
top notch
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top-notch
 commodities.
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,we are living in
modern
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a modern
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 world, where top merchendise are doing extensive publicity
throigh
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through
 digital and classic means,
tp
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to
 work on human urge of owning expensive and branded goods. Social media
playing
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is playing
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 a primary role
and
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apply
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in
recent
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the recent
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 rise of human urge to own and showcase luxury items. To
examplify
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exemplify
 it,
alomost
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almost
 all of
top
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the top
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 celebrities of
world
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the world
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 not just promote expensive commodities, they have their own brands of
high
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high-end
end
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 goods,
general
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the general
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 public get influenecd by them and
end
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 up buying heavy on
pocket
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the pocket
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items
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apply
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.
However
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,
this
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 scenario brings
lot
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a lot
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benefits
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of benefits
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 to modern
socity
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society
,
comparing
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compared
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 to ancient times. With
rapid
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a rapid
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 increase in population and to meet
up
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apply
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new demands lot of factories and outlets are opening, it give employment to
considerable
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a considerable
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amuont
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amount
 of people.
Humen
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Human
 behaviour of shopping
the high
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for high-end
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end
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 goods
,
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apply
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 led to new development paths
, in
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. In the
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 current era
even
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, even
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simple looking
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simple-looking
 items are
scientificaly
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scientifically
 backed and
enviroment
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environmentally
 friendly. If humans were not spending on
latest
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the latest
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 and branded commodities, competition probably would not be there, and leads to
scinetific
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scientific
 and economic decline.

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Answer both parts more clearly: reasons and if it is good or bad.
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Give one clear reason in each body part, then explain it more.
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Add a short example that is real and easy to understand.
coherence and cohesion
Write a clear ending that repeats your main view.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words like first, also, however, and in the end.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in one paragraph only.
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You gave a clear opinion that this trend is positive.
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You included reasons like ads, social media, and jobs.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has an introduction and two body paragraphs.
coherence and cohesion
You tried to connect ideas with words like additionally and however.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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