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The chart below shows the chnages in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012.

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The given graph illustrates the changes in three main crime areas in
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 of Manchester throughout 9
year
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years
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.
Overall
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, three main trends can be observed. The level of burglary significantly decreased over
given
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the given
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 time period, a slight rise can be seen in
car theft amount
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the amount of car theft,
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 and
robbery level
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the level of robbery
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 remained more or less the same.

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