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the table below shows the number of temporary migrant workers in four countries in 2003 and 2006 and the number of these workers per 1000 people in these countries in 2006.

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The given table illustrates how many migrants were employed temporarily in four specific countries in the
year
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 2003 and 2006
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and the number of these employees per 1.000 individuals in these countries in 2006.
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, it is crystal clear that the USA was dominant among the four particular countries for the number of migrant workers,
while
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 New Zealand was the least preferred country for international employees in the above mentioned years.
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, New Zealand was considered the leader for the number of global workers per 1000 people, who were hired only for a limited period,
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however
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the USA took the lowest position.Looking at the data in detail, the USA leads the category with 577,000
laborers
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,followed by
the
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Australia
that
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 stood at 152.000 .The United Kingdom and New Zealand hired
comparetively
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comparatively
fewer immigrants.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Temporary migrant workers
  • Labor mobility
  • Statistical data
  • Insights
  • Trends
  • Socio-economic factors
  • Economic growth
  • Demand for labor
  • Immigration policies
  • Disparities
  • Concentration
  • Comparative analysis
  • Consequences
  • Economic impact
  • Cultural integration
  • Social services
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