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You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college administrator. In your letter: say which part-time course it is explain why you have to cancel your booking ask about booking a different course You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ..........,

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Dear Madam/Sir, I hope
your
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 are doing well. I would like to inform you about my
situtation
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situation
 with a part-
time
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course
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 at your college. I have recently booked a
course
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 that I cannot attend that day because I have an interview at the same
time
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.
This
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 interview is really important for me because I have been looking
a
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job opportunity for a long
time
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. Since I cannot change
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interview's
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interview
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time
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, I hope that you can understand my inconvenience and you can help me
about
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with
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this
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 issue I
face
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 right now.
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, I want to check
a
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the
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 possibility
to book
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of booking
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 a different
course
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 in your schedule,
wich
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which
 is
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 Science
Course
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 for Beginners
,
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.
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 I
genuily
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genuinely
 want to attend that
course
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. Please let me know how I can register it and if any
additinoal
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additional
 information is needed. I am looking forward
your
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 response. Thank you for your
time
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 and support. Kind regards.

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task response
Task response: Say the name of the first course more clearly. Now you say only a part-time course.
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Task response: Explain the cancel reason well, but add one clear line to ask to cancel the booking.
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Task response: Your tone is polite and good for a letter to college staff.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your letter has a clear start, reason, and new request. This helps the reader follow your ideas.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Some lines are too long. Use shorter sentences to make your meaning more clear.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Linking words like also, so, and because can help the letter flow better.
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You answer all three points in the task.
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You ask about a different course in a clear way.
coherence and cohesion
Your paragraphs mostly stay on one main idea.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a polite opening and ending.
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