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You are currently doing a diploma course at a college, but you need to take a week off during this course. Write a letter to the college Principal. In your letter give details of your course explain why you need a week off say what you want the Principal to do

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Dear Mr. Thommes, I hope you are doing well. I am writing to request a
one week
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one-week
 leave of absence from the
course
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 I am currently enrolled. I would appreciate your consideration of my request and would like to provide details of my
course
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. I have taken two years of post graduation diploma in Business Analyst
and
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, and
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 I'm
currenly
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currently
 in
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the second
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 semester. Yesterday, my parents informed me that my grandmother is not feeling well, and she has been diagnosed with
Thyriod
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thyroid
. Fortunately, it is
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 major problem, doctor consulted her to undergo medical check-ups
inorder
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in order
 to understand the severity.
Although
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 my parents can look after her, I still want to see her in person. Since there are many assignments pending, I would like you to extend the deadline and notify all
proffesors
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professors
 so that
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they can
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 make a note at their end. As I am
in
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 the dean's list, I do not want to lose marks in any of my
assigments
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assignments
.
This
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course
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 is important not only
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because
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 I
hone
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 my knowledge
but
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, but
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also
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my
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because my
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 grades can determine how much I was involved
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this
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course
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. I would greatly appreciate your consideration and understanding
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 situation. Looking forward to
hear
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 back from you. Yours faithfully, Taylor

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but some ideas are not clear. Say more clearly why you must go now, not only that you want to see her.
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Task response: Your request to the Principal is clear, but asking the Principal to tell all teachers may be too much. Ask in a simple and polite way for help with missed work.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end, but some sentences are hard to follow. Use short and clear sentences.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Keep one main idea in one paragraph. For example: course details in one paragraph, reason for leave in one paragraph, request in one paragraph.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use easy link words like and, so, because, but, first, and also.
task response
Task response: You include the course, the reason for leave, and what you want the Principal to do.
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Task response: The tone is mostly polite and fits a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The greeting and closing are correct for a formal letter.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are in a good order overall.
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