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The table gives us information about the number of people working as researchers in technology per million people in five countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table illustrates the
number
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 of researchers working in technology per
million
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 in five distinct countries over a five-year period from 2003 to 2007.
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, the employment of technologists increased across all
the
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five
nation
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nations
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 except
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 Poland and Togo.
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, Poland registered
as
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the highest
number
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 of working researchers throughout the period.
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, Turkey experienced a significant increase in
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number
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the number
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 of employers by the end of the timeframe. In detail, 285
million
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empoyers
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employers
 were working in Poland, becoming the dominant
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 in the chart.
This
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 figure gradually reduced to 234
million
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, and continued to decline by reaching 226
million
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 by 2007.
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, 18
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 worked in 2003 in Tokyo, and
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 figure increased to 23
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 by 2005, and recovered
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to the same
in
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level in
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 2007.
In contrast
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, all the other three
nation
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nations
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 saw a growth in
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 throughout the
timeperiod
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time period
. Mexico stood at 147
million
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 workers, and it climbed to 242
million
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researchers
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workers
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 in 2005.
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this
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, it saw a fall reaching
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183
million
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 employers, becoming the second most dominant across the given nation.
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, Turkey and
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the Maldives
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 followed a similar upward trend. Turkey initiated at 47
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 in 2003, and rose
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to 106
million
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 by 2007,
whereas
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Maldives
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the Maldives
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 saw a slight incline from 103
million
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 in 2003 to 114
million
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 by the end of the period.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • country
  • countries
  • people
  • work
  • as
  • researchers
  • technology
  • per
  • million
  • highest
  • lowest
  • more
  • less
  • than
  • difference
  • gap
  • similar
  • different
  • compare
  • pattern
  • overall
  • data
  • show
  • indicate
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