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The tables below give information about the sales of cocoa beans and coffee in five European countries in 2000 and 2005.

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The tables
provied
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provide
 information about the
sales
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 of
cocoa
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beans
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 and
coffee
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 in five European countries, which are
United
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the United
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kingdom
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Kingdom
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,
GermanThe
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Germany. The
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 tables below give information about the
sales
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 of
cocoa
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beans
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 and
coffee
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 in five European countries in 2000 and 2005. y, France,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and
Switzerland
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. Between 2000 and 2005. Over a period of five years.
the
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The
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 units
measured
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are measured
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 by
millions
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.
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, it can be
see
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seen
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 that the highest number of
sales
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on
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of
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coffee
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 in the
UK.
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UK,
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 and the number of
sales
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by
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of
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 coca
beans
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 was the lowest in
Switzerland
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. In terms of
salling
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sales
, Figure for
coffee
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, Germany
was
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spent 25.5
millions
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euro
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sales
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 in 2000, but it
was
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apply
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increased
for
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to
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 49.1
millions
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euro
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 in 2005. In the UK
spent
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,
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 68.3
millions
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euro
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but
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, but
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 it was recpectiveliy rose
137
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millions
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euro
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 in 2005.
also
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Switzerland
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, France and
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 spent 7.5, 32.6,
15.2
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and 15.2
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millions
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euro
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,
those are
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respectively; these amounts
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 increased in 2005,
it was
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to
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 14.9, 65.2,
30.3
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and 30.3
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millions
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euro
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. Over a period of 5 years.
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 the
remining
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remaining
,
Between
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between
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 2000 and 2005, Britain spent 13.6
millions
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euro
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 on
cocoa
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beans
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but
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, but
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 it
was
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apply
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rose
27.3
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to 27.3
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millions
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euro
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. In Germany, 2.6
millions
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euro
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 spent on
cocoa
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beans
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it
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, which
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also
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 increased
5.2
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by 5.2
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.
in
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In
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 2000, France,
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and
Switzerland
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 spent 4.6, 2.4 and 0.9
millions
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euro
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but
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, but
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 it was awfully increased
9.3
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, 3.8 and 1.8
millions
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euro
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 in 2005.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, cocoa, beans, coffee, switzerland, millions, euro with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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