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The plans below show a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The maps give
the
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information about the improvement of the Porth
Harbour
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 from 2000 to
today
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. The first impression is that the
Harbour
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today
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made
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 use of more
areas
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 than in the past. It can be seen that there are several
areas
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 that still stay the same
today
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 as in 2000. These include the
Carpark
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car park
 and the Showers and Toilets which are located in the north west of the map.
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,
one
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Showers
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shower
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 and Toilets are built between the two Carpark
today
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.
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, the Porth
Harbour
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today
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also
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 has
one
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Passenger ferries
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passenger ferry
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 which
right
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is right
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 next to
the left of
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the existing
one
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 from 2000.
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, an
area
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 for Cafés and shops is added next to the Lifeboat
one
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. Another significant difference is the relocation of the Marina (private yachts) and the fishing boats
areas
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.
Today
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, the Marina
is
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 moved down to the place of the old Fishing boats
area
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 to have more space and
vice-versa
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vice versa
, the Fishing boats
area
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is
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 relocated
at
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 the old Marina
area
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. The
last
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this
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Harbour
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 is the Construction in the South East. The disused old Castle was destroyed
and
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 a new Hotel was built there
today
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and
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, and
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 another Hotel
Is
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also
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 added in the Private beach
area
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.
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, even
that
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though
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 the
harbour
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 still keeps some
areas
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 unchanged, there are many reconstructions and improvements for the Porth
Harbour
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today
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task response
Write a clearer overview. Say the main changes in one short part.
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Use more exact words for place and change. This will make your ideas easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Group changes better. Put same kinds of changes in one part.
coherence and cohesion
Check linking words. Some are used well, but some sentences are too long.
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You compare the past and today in many parts of the essay.
coherence and cohesion
You have an introduction and an ending, so the essay has a clear shape.
Fully explain your ideas

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • harbour (or harbor)
  • docks
  • shipping lanes
  • warehouses
  • recreational areas
  • infrastructure
  • additions
  • removals
  • facilities
  • environmental sustainability
  • economic impact
  • local community
  • capacity
  • technological advancements
  • industrial shipping
  • recreational use
  • surrounding infrastructure
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