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The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The table and chart provide information about the location and different types of
dance
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class
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classes
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 undertaken by young
people
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 in Australia. The chart says In Private Studios 48% young
people
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 are taking
dance
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classes
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. And in community halls and other 18% folks are taking
dance
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classes
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 And other location. After school
classes
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24
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%
people
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 are taking
classes
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and
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, and
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 other
last
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 one location college based studios these are 10% percent
people
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 Taking
classes
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. The table reveal in
Ballet
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ballet-type
type
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dance
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600
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, 600
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students
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 under
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age
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the age
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 of 11
learning
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are learning
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. And 300
age
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 of 11-16 are learning. And 420
students
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age of
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aged
 11-16
learning
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are learning
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 and
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last
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the last
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type
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 of
Dance
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 Modern
these
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, these
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 are 515
students
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are learning
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apply
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who are under
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age
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the age
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 of 11
and
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, and
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 300 other
students
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 who are
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age of
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aged
 11-16.
To
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In
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 conclusion
in
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, in
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 Private Studio
the
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, the
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numbers
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number
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 of
people
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much
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is much
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 higher than
other
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in other
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 locations. And
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type
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the number
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 of ballet
dance
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classes
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 number of student Much higher in under
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age
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the age
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 of 11 than
other
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for other
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type
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types
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 of
dance
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classes
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Linking words: Add more linking words.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, people, classes, type, students, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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