The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given diagram describes the process of manufacturing
bamboo
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fabrics.
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, the process includes a few main stages, which are
showen
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shown
on the diagram and are numbered from 1 to 8. The first stage, obviously, consists of planting and growing
bamboo
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plants, usually happening in spring. The second phase,
We
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which we
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could say
harvesting
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is harvesting
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one, is happening in the middle part of the year
in
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, in
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autumn.
Bamboo
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stems are
cutting
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cut
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off by the
season
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seasonal
workers, collecting and
sendening
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sending
to the special plants during
this
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period. In the plants, what are showed a the third and the
forth
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fourth
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stages.
on
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On
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the diagram, the
bamboo
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stems are
cutting
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cut
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into long strips,
then
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produced
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the produced
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strips are
crushing
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crushed
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to make liquid pulp. During the next phase these pulp is
filtering
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filtered
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through the special types of sieves to separate long fibres from
liquid
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the liquid
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.
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the fibres, filtered by
previous
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the previous
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step, are being undergone through the
softenning
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softening
procedure.
This
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procedure includes adding water and amine oxide. The seventh stage is
the
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spinning the
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sppinning the soften fibres to make a strong
bamboo
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thread. Produced yarns might be used to make fabric, which is the
last
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-
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apply
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eighth phase, by
weaveing
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weaving
them using special equipment.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bamboo with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bamboo
  • fabric
  • cloth
  • fiber
  • yarn
  • thread
  • weave
  • knit
  • stages
  • steps
  • process
  • harvest
  • cut
  • crush
  • break
  • fiber
  • spin
  • weave
  • finish
  • wash
  • dye
  • color
  • soft
  • strong
  • material
  • final
  • make
  • from
  • to
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