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The chart below shows the percentage of households owning different electronic devices in 2000 and 2020. Device 2000 2020 Television 85% 95% Computer 40% 80% Mobile Phone 30% 98% Tablet 0% 65%

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The bar chart compares the percentage of
households
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 that owned four different electronic devices in 2000 and 2020.
Overall
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, the
ownership
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 of all devices increased over the 20-year period. Mobile
phones
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 experienced the most significant growth and became the most widely owned device by 2020,
while
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 televisions remained popular throughout both years. In 2000, televisions were the most common electronic device, with 85% of
households
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 owning one. Computers were owned by 40% of
households
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,
whereas
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 mobile
phones
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 were less common at 30%. Tablets were not owned by any
households
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 at that time. By 2020, the proportion of
households
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 with mobile
phones
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 had risen dramatically to 98%, making them the most popular device. Television
ownership
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also
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 increased slightly, reaching 95%. Computer
ownership
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 doubled from 40% to 80%, indicating that computers had become much more common.
In addition
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, tablets, which were not available in 2000, were owned by 65% of
households
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 in 2020, showing their rapid adoption over the two decades. In conclusion,
ownership
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 of electronic devices increased considerably between 2000 and 2020, with mobile
phones
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 and tablets showing the greatest growth,
while
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 televisions maintained consistently high levels of
ownership
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, ownership, phones with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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