you have recently moved to different house. write a letterto an english -speaking friend.in your letter Explain why you have moved. Describe the new house. invite your friend to come and visit.

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Dear Amy, How're you doing?
it
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has been a long time since we spoke. I'm writing to let you know that I have
finally
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relocated from
that
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building you visited me
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last in
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. You remember I have been telling you that I will move out once I get a better place
, anyways
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. Anyway
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, I
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did
as
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, as
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the former
house
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became uncomfortable to live in. The bedroom walls were getting soaked
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, and
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and made
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the whole room damp.
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, because of the soaked walls, my room started to smell very weird
,
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.
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I complained to the landlord
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, but
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he did not give me any positive feedback.
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, I got a
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close to the library
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, and
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I absolutely love it here.
This
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house
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is
at
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on
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the
top most
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topmost
floor of a
five storey
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five-storey
building, and has a very beautiful view of one side of the city. Fortunately, you don't need to worry about the stress of climbing stairs
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;
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there is an elevator.
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, it has a very large garden where I think I will grow some veggies.
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, I know you visit the library often, and since the
house
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is just across, you could easily pop in whenever you are done
from
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with
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the library. I miss you so much, and I hope you will come visit soon. Best wishes, Lina

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task response
Task response: You answer all parts, but add a bit more detail about the new home.
task response
Task response: Keep the tone friendly all the way. "Anyways" is a bit weak; "anyway" is better.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Your ideas are clear and easy to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: Use a few linking words with care, and check small word order points like "the top floor".
task response
Task response: You clearly say why you moved, what the new house is like, and you invite your friend to visit.
coherence and cohesion
Coherence and cohesion: The letter has a clear start, middle, and end, with good paragraphing.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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