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The bar chart below gives information about the percentage of the population living in urban areas in the world and in different continents.

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The bar graph provides information on the percentage of people living in cities around the globe in various countries
accross
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across
 two time periods, which are the years 1950,
2007
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2007,
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 with a projection of 2030.
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, the number of city residents grew in all five given
continants
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continents
,
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however
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, Africa,
Asia
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 and Latin
America
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 have witnessed the largest
number of
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population increase over the years.
In
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 the
begining
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beginning
 of the period, around two-thirds of North Americans and just over half of Europeans lived in urban areas.
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, Africa and
Asia
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 had the lowest number of city residents
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, with
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 very similar percentages of 15 and 17 per cent. In the year 2007, North
America
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's urban areas were the most populated in the world
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 79 per cent of its people living in cities, followed by Latin
America
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 and Europe with a percentage of 76 and 72
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respectively.
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 the least populated urban
distrects
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districts
 were in Africa with 37 per cent
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, and
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Asia
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 only four points over that. It is
forcated
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forecast
 that these
percentage
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percentages
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 will continue growing steadily everywhere, where almost 90
percent
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per cent
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 of
North
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the North
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America
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American
 population will live in metropolitan
districts
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districts,
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 as the most populated and the least populated continent is expected to be
Asia
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with
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 half of the population moving to cities.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words asia, america with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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