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The graph below gives information about international tourist arrivals in five countries. USA,France, malaysia, Brazil and Egypt

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The line graph outlines
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data about international tourist arrivals in five countries (
USA
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,
France
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, Malaysia,
Brazil
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 and
Egypt
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 from 1995 to 2010.Units are measured in
millions
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.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
tourists
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 in
Brazil
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 and
Egypt
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were
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 the same,
while
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proportion
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the proportion
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 of Malaysia did not
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 proportion of other countries.In 2010, the
number
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 of
tourists
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were
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 the same in
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USA
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the USA
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 and
France
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. Regarding the highest figures,
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number
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 of
tourists
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 in
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USA
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the USA
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were
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 similar to the
number
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of
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in
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France
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, accounting for 90
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millions
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million
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.
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,
France
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 had a significant rise from 30
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millions
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million
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 in 1995 to 90
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millions
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million
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 after 15 years.The
number
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 of
tourists
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 in
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USA
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the USA
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were
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was
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 always the highest in all
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shown
 years,except
2010
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in 2010
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years
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. Turning to the smallest proportions,
The
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number
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 of visitors
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Brazil
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to Brazil
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 and
Egypt
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 were always constant, proportions started from 10
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millions
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million
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 in 1995 and followed
similarly
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 to 2010, at 20
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millions
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million
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.
Nonetheless
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,
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number
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the number
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 of visitors in Malaysiya were more than in
Brazil
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 and
Egypt
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but
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proportion
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the proportion
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 was constant, accounting for 20
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millions
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million
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 in 1995 and 40
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millions
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million
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 in 2010.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words usa, france, brazil, egypt, millions, number, tourists with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • International tourist arrivals
  • Trends
  • Highlighting
  • Analysing
  • Potential factors
  • Growth patterns
  • Declines
  • Driving those changes
  • Influenced
  • External factors
  • Global economic conditions
  • Health crises
  • Government policies
  • Visa regulations
  • Tourism promotion efforts
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