The pie charts indicate changes in the proportions of energy produced in a country from 1983 to 2003.

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The two charts

shows

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show

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the changes that happened in the proportions of

energy

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produced in a country from the years 1983 to 2003.

Overall

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, the

energy

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produced that are used in

this

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country

are

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is of

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five types

of produced

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apply

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( hydropower ,

Oil

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, nuclear power, coal, Natural gas ).

Also

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, as it can be

showing

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shown,

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the

oil

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has the biggest proportion in the two years .

However

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, hydropower has the lowest figures. In 1983 ,

oil

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was the highest

energy

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produced in the country

with

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, with

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43% . Coal With the

secend

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second

highest proportion at 23%. In 2003 ,

oil

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is sitll the number one

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energy

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consumption

but

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, but

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with a slight drop to 38%.

Whereas

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, the nuclear power has

change

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changed

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between the two

yeas

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years

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from 20% to 24% .

Also

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, coal, which Has increas from23% to 13% . Unlike

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apply

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the hydropower

with

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, with

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the same proportion with 14%.

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Jul 19, 2026

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.

Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, oil with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 4 times.

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
12
Grammar mistakes
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

146 words

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