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Your neighbours have a dog that is noisy at night. You can’t sleep. Write a letter to your neighbours. In your letter: – describe the problem with the dog – explain why it is important for you to sleep – outline what your neighbours could do about the situation

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Dear Sir/Ma’am I am writing
this
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 letter to address an ongoing disturbance caused by your dog during the night. Since
last
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week
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 I have been experiencing
the
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difficulties in falling asleep, because during the
night
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night,
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 your pet starts barking and doesn’t stop for hours and hours. As I am an engineer in railways,
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proper
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 sleep is very crucial for me to handle the
fast paced
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fast-paced
 tasks.
Due to
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 ongoing
disturbances
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 it has hindered my performance at work.
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, I have taken a day off to
complete
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catch up on
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 my sleep. I strongly believe that
,
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 there is something wrong with the dog’s health.
Doctor
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Doctor's
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 attention needs to be taken to handle these
kind
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 of issues, you may need to book an appointment for the closest date. I request you
hand
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handle
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this
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 issue with
full of
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care
as
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, as
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 pets neither less than
a
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family
member
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.
I
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 waiting to hear back from you! Yours Sincerely Neeraj

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task response
Use a more right greeting for neighbours, not Sir or Ma’am.
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Say more clearly what the neighbours can do, like keep the dog inside at night or take it to a vet.
coherence and cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like because, so, and also.
coherence and cohesion
End the letter in a polite and clear way.
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You answered all three parts of the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your letter has clear paragraphs.
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The problem is easy to understand.
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The order of ideas is clear.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • noisy
  • disruptive
  • affecting sleep
  • vital
  • important
  • well-being
  • productivity
  • neighbors
  • training
  • solution
  • noise-reducing device
  • barking
  • disturbance
  • tolerance
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