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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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This
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 graph illustrates the
number
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 of
tourists
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 visiting a
Caribbean
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island
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, separating
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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 ships and staying on
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island
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the island
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, alongside
with
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apply
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the total.
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, the
number
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 of
tourists
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 visiting
Caribbean
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island
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 increase modestly from 2010 to 2017, with a considerable growth in the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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which
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, which
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 surpassed
visitors
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 staying on islands
2015
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in 2015
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. From 2010 to 2014, the total
number
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 of
tourists
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 visiting a
Caribbean
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island
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 doubled from 1 million to 2 million.
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 the
number
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 stays constant between 2015 and 2016, a noticeable increase in the total
visitors
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 can still be observed between 2013
to
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and
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 2017.
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 with the steady upward trend in total
visitors
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, the
number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
cruise
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 ships
also
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climb
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climbed
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 significantly from 2010 to 2017 and
arrive at
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reached
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 2
millions
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million
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 in 2017, which is 8 times larger than the 0.25
millions
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million
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 in 2010. In comparison, the
numbers
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number
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 of
visitors
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 staying on
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island
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the island
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rise
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rises
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 modestly. It's significant to note that after declining in 2016, the
number
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 of
staying
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people staying
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 on
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island
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the island
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 was surpassed by those staying on
cruise
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 ships. All in all,
this
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 graph shows
an
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a
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 considerable increase in
tourists
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 to
Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 over the years.
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, it
also
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 presents a shift in patterns of
tourists
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' choices of visiting
Caribbean
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island
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islands
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 from staying on
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cruise
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a cruise
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 ship to
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island
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the island
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, caribbean, island, visitors, cruise with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "modestly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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