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The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.

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The given bar chart illustrates the card prices on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne in 2013 on tow- day.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the figures varied during the period .
in
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In
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 general, the highest figures were recorded on Monday of
week
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 1 and
Fri
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 on
week
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 2,
while
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 the lowest figures were seen on Tuesday, Wednesday, and Thu. In terms of bill airline ticket from Sydney to Melbourne, the rate for
week
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 1 is highest on Monday at a
price
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 80$,
however
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 money ticket
price
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 decreased sharp
fromt
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 35$ unit between Tue and Wed. But, go up sharp 75$ units in
Fri
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as well as
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 fall significant 50$
fromt
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 on Sunday. It seems to me that,
week
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 2 dropping
than
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apply
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more than
week
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 1, lowest on Tue and Wed
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fromt 35$
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from $35
, but
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price
Correct article usage
the price
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tiket
Correct your spelling
of the ticket
 increased rapidly on
Fri
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 with 75$ and went down considerably on Sunday
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fromt 50$
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to $50
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.
This
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 date of
demage
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damage
 airline ticket Melbourne to Sydney , the rate for
week
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 1
the
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is the
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 highest on
Fri
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 with a
price
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 80$, but decreased considerably on Sunday
fromt
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 50$.
However
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, the
week
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 2
price
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 lawest Tue, Wed and Thu with manage 35$ and go up significant highest
also
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 60$ law than more
week
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 1
.
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price.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words week, fri, price, fromt with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "go up" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerably" was used 2 times.
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