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The chart below gives information about the growth of the urban population in certain parts of the world including the prediction of the future. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar chart illustrates the comparison of the development of the urban population in certain parts of the
world
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 , including
in Whole
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the whole world
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World
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,
Africa
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, Asia and Latin America , over a period of three years from 1950 to 2030.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the figures varied during the period. In general, the highest figures were recprded on Latin America,
while
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 the lowest figures were seen in
Africa
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. In terms of
Africa
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, the
amount percentages
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percentage
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 of the lawest
fromt
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 11% to 1950.
As well as
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, the amount increased sharply
fromt
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 39%
units
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 in 2000. The rate
go
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goes
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 up slowly
fromt
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 51%
units
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 between 2030.
Besides
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 Asis
also
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 growth considerable in the urban population between 1950 and 2030 from about 13% to over 54%.
This
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 date of Latin America, the rate percentages of the highest
fromt
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 41% to 1950. Was similar to continue increasing sharply
fromt
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 80%
units
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 in 2030.
In addition
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, Whole
World
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also
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 going up rapidly compared to more
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Africa
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of Africa
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 and Asia. The percentage of Whole
World
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 grow remained stable
fromt
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 30%
units
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 in 1950 to 59% the following year

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, africa, fromt, units with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban population
  • future predictions
  • historical data
  • urbanization trends
  • rates of growth
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • economic development
  • migration
  • government policies
  • upward trend
  • pace of urbanization
  • catching up
  • comparative analysis
  • regional differences
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