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The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people believe that the working week should be shorter so that employees can enjoy longer weekends.
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 some people argue that working longer hours over a few days reduces productivity, I disagree because longer weekends can negatively affect motivation and workplace efficiency. On the one hand, it might be true that extended weekends play a crucial role in enhancing physical well-being.
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, when individuals spend more than two days being isolated from their professional responsibilities,
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 find it difficult to return to a fixed schedule after several days of complete relaxation.
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, returning to the structured environment becomes mentally difficult.
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 extended absence frequently results in a phenomenon known as “the Monday blues”, where employees struggle with low motivation and difficulty concentrating on their first day back.
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, professional productivity heavily declines at the start of the working week.
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, it can be mitigated by replacing only half of the regular Monday shift with fun team-oriented activities.
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 as team catch-ups and planning, rather than exhausting high-pressure deadlines. Companies can be more flexible by changing the start time on Mondays, easing the psychological shock of returning to a rigid schedule.

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coherence cohesion
Write a clear end paragraph. Your essay stops too fast, so the reader does not get a full final answer.
task achievement
Support each main idea more. Add one clear example to show why a longer weekend can hurt work.
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Keep your position fully clear all through the essay. You say you disagree, but the second body part talks more about a way to fix Monday than about the main question.
coherence cohesion
Link ideas more clearly. Some parts jump too fast from one idea to the next.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear start and the main view is easy to find.
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You stay on the topic and discuss work, rest, and motivation in a relevant way.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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