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Band 1

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many individuals debate whether
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 a few working days and longer weekends.
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 numerous individuals agree with
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 topic outweigh the benefits. From my perspective, I strongly believe that employees should work regularly to balance the workforce shortages and to solve other problems across the
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. On the one hand, as Artificial Intelligence is rapidly
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 we should maintain our previous regular work schedule as we should
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, individuals have to try different things and educate themselves in different ways.
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, some countries have many occasional days
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. Especially, the United States
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, which is one of the
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 developed countries,
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 compared to other countries.
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, workforce shortages and customer frustrations are
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Answer the question more fully. Say clearly why you disagree, and keep that idea in all body parts.
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Add a short conclusion at the end. Restate your main view in one clear sentence.
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Explain each main point with one clear reason and one simple example.
coherence and cohesion
Use topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph so the reader can follow your ideas.
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Link ideas in a simple way with words like first, also, for example, and finally.
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Finish incomplete ideas. Some sentences stop too early, so the meaning is not clear.
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You give your opinion in the introduction.
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Your essay has a clear paragraph form with an introduction and body parts.
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You try to use examples about real countries and real work life.
Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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