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The maps below show a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The chart illustrates the alterations in a beachfront area in Australia in 1950 and at present.
Overall
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, in
this
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 period were some changes and
also
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 some
of
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constructions
were stayed
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remained
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 as in the past.
For instance
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, pavilion and dining tables.
However
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,
the
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several structures were modified
like
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, such as
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 the main
road
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,
car
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 park and others.
To begin
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 with, a
road
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 has been extended to reach the
light house
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lighthouse
 as before
were
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apply
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this
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road
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shorter
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was shorter
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.
In addition
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,
car
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 parks
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also were
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were also
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 altered. After decades,
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car
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the car
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 park has been doubled
so
Punctuation problem
, so
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 near the ending part the
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road
Punctuation problem
road,
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 were build one
car
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 park
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also
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was also
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.
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built.
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Furthermore
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, swimming pools
which
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that are
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 along the beach
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also have
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have also
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 been extended. At the present on of the two swimming pools
were
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was
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 expanded,
while
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 in 1950
were both of them
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, both of them were
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 the same.
Moreover
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,
were structured new modern buildings
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new modern buildings were
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also
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, like
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constructed, like
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restaurant
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a restaurant
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 and two surf clubs.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words road, car with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • beachfront
  • area
  • natural
  • buildings
  • changed
  • constructions
  • hotels
  • apartments
  • park
  • replaced
  • commercial
  • trees
  • green spaces
  • decreased
  • development
  • access
  • paths
  • roads
  • natural beauty
  • affected
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