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The chart below shows the main reasons why students chose to study at a particular university in the UK in 1995 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The depicted graph delineates the information about students in the
yaer
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years
 1995 and 2005 who chose to study at a particular university situated in the UK and outlines the
difference
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differences
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 and comparisons
in
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between
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them.
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 The
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 summary of the given bar graph quite vividly illustrates that the most students enrolled in suitable degree courses and showed elevated results.
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, in the subject quality of
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teaching,
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 mostly remained the same. In
detail
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graph
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graph,
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 it demonstrates that the first topic has shown 20% growth in 1995, but it
is
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apply
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decreased in the year 2005.
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, Close to
parental
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the parental
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 home has 10% of students,
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 it rose to 22%.
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, good
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 and social activities had shown
good
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a good
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 number of
individuals
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individuals'
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 interest
intially
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initially
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However
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 in the year
2005
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2005,
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 it
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was
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 barely above 5%. The most development had been
showned
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shown
 by suitable degree courses showing
intial
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initial
 progress of 35% and after that
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rose
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 to 38%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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