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The diagram below shows how fabric is manufactured from bamboo

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The flow chart illustrates the way in which
bamboo
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fabric
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 is made.
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, there are several stages in the whole process, beginning with the planting of
bamboo
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 plants and ending with the
producing
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production
 of clothes from
bamboo
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fabric
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.
To begin
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, the
bamboo
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 plants used to make the
fabric
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 are planted in
Spring
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the spring
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. Once plants have
been
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apply
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grown, they are
then
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 harvested in autumn. In the next stage,
harvested
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the harvested
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 product is cut into strips. In order to make a liquid pulp, strips are crushed ( in order to obtain a ) .As soon as
this
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 step is complete , the pulp is filtered to make sure long fibres are separated from liquid ones. Before spinning so as to make yarn, fibres are softened by adding water and amine oxide. In the subsequent stage, the yarn goes through the weaving process to make a
fabric
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.
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, clothes are produced from
fabric
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.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bamboo, fabric with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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