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Some people think it’s better to choose friends who always have the same opinion as them. Other people believe it’s good to have friends who sometimes disagrees with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is an irrefutable fact that the company of the right person has a significant impact on an individual’s life.
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 some
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 argue that it is more beneficial to have
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 with the same views than companions who disagree on certain aspects of life. I totally disagree with the latter view because
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 with different mindsets may enhance cognitive ability and bring excitement in life.
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 essay will analyse my views using relevant examples to prove my arguments. On the one hand,
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 with the same beliefs can reduce complications and help make decisions faster by agreeing with a person’s views. To illustrate
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, humans often make a decision instantly or choose an option quickly if they receive a positive response
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 a particular option out of numerous options. To exemplify, girls who go shopping with
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, who have similar choices on clothing and their designs, often finalise their dresses faster than if they go alone.
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, a company of
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 with the same opinions saves plenty of time.
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,
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 with disagreements on some aspects broaden their
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’ horizons by presenting a different opinion. To clarify,
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 a colleague’s different opinion, a person feels the need to explore other available options, which results in increasing their knowledge and experience.
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, if a person gets contradictory reviews from his or her mates on a mobile phone before buying it, he or she will look around other brands’ phones.
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 will increase knowledge about phones.
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, conflicting opinions often make conversation exciting and making choices based on different thoughts brings positive vibes in a friendship. In conclusion,
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 strongly contend that like-minded thoughts have greater benefits, I believe
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 with different or opposite viewpoints are vitally important. They will not only bring a positive energy to the relationship but
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 provide opportunities to obtain more knowledge.

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overall score
Estimated score: 7. This is a clear and well-organised answer. To get a higher score, make your ideas more exact and give stronger support for them.
task response
Your opinion is clear, but the first sentence says “I totally disagree with the latter view”. The latter view is that friends should sometimes disagree, but the rest of your essay supports this view. Change it to: “I agree with the latter view.”
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Explain why friends with the same views are good in more depth. Saving time is one point, but you could also say that shared views may make people feel safe and understood.
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Some ideas are too general. For example, “bring excitement in life” and “positive vibes” do not fully show why disagreement is useful. Say that respectful disagreement can help people see weak points in a plan and make better choices.
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Your phone example needs one more step. Explain that after looking at other phones, the person may find a cheaper or better phone. This makes the example stronger.
coherence and cohesion
The main order is good, but some sentences repeat the same point. In paragraph two, you say people explore options, gain knowledge, and gain experience. Join these ideas more smoothly and explain one clear result.
coherence and cohesion
Use links carefully. “Furthermore” introduces a new point, but the next sentence is not fully clear: “making choices based on different thoughts brings positive vibes”. Write: “Also, respectful debate can make conversations more interesting.”
coherence and cohesion
Make the first sentence of each body paragraph state the main point more directly. For example: “Friends with similar views can make daily choices easier.” Then explain and give an example.
coherence and cohesion
Keep the words for people the same. You use “friends”, “companions”, “colleague”, and “mates”. As the question is about friends, mostly use “friends” throughout.
task response
You discuss both views and clearly give your own view. Your main ideas are clear: same views can save time, while different views can help people learn more.
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You use examples about shopping and buying a phone. These examples are relevant and help explain your points.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear four-part shape: introduction, first view, second view, and conclusion.
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You use clear linking words such as “On the one hand”, “On the other hand”, “For example”, and “In conclusion”.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • harmonious
  • stress-free
  • disagreements
  • conflicts
  • reinforce
  • validate
  • comforting
  • reassuring
  • broaden your understanding
  • perspectives
  • challenge intellectually
  • think critically
  • personal growth
  • development
  • healthy debates
  • communication skills
  • mutual respect
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