The pie charts show the changes in the proportions for different forms transport which people used to get to their offices and turn back in a European city in 1959 and 2009

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The pie charts illustrate the difference in the percentages for several
transports
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transport
media in
European
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Europe
between 1959 and 2009.
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, transfer by tool noted the
significant
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highest media in 1959,
while
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car has the largest proportion in 2009.
Average of
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distance rose from 3.5 km to 19 km
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furthermore
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,
duration
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the duration
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climbed from 17 minutes to 42 minutes. Regarding
to
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foot accounted for more than half
in1959
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in 1959
,
while
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it reduced dramatically to approximately half in 2009.
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contrast
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car was only one
ten
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tenth
during 1959
later
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, and later
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tripled in 2009. In terms of
bus
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buses
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and trains remained approximately stabile with both had 15% in1959, and 13% and 15% respectively.
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addition
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addition,
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others tool increased remarkably to more than
doubled
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • modes of transport
  • private transport
  • public transport
  • car ownership
  • cycling
  • pedestrian
  • commuter trends
  • urban infrastructure
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental sustainability
  • public policy
  • evolution
  • percentage
  • proportion
  • decade
  • convenience
  • accessibility
  • reliability
  • urban planning
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