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You have some time off work and are hoping to visit a close friend, Stephanie, for a few days. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter suggest spending time together explain why you have time to do this propose some activities

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Dear Ms. Stephanie How are you?. I hope
this
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 letter finds you well and in good health. It has been a
while
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 since we
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 met. So
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 thought I was writing to inform you that I will have a day off next week.
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 why I have a plan to come to your village because I miss some views there. First of all, one of thing would be do is i wanna seeing the sunrise in the morning , after that we will surf
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 it is long time
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since I
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 did that . I think it will be an amazing activity
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 we have not been doing a lot of things together on the beach because we are always busy at the office . You do not worry about my job because the manager has given me one week off for
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a holiday
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 . Someone will handle all of the work
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 I am staying at your house. I would be delighted if you accept my invitation
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 I guess it will be new memories
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 year.
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 am looking forward to hearing your response soon. Your faithfully Paul

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task response
Score: 6. You answer all parts, but make the plan clearer. Say how many days you will stay and ask if this time is good for Stephanie.
task response
Use a more friendly start and end. For a close friend, write “Dear Stephanie” and end with “Best wishes” or “Love”.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 5. Put the reason for your time off before the activity plan. This will make the letter easier to follow.
coherence and cohesion
Keep one main idea in each part. Make one part about the visit, one about work, and one about what you will do together.
coherence and cohesion
Use clear links: “I have a week off, so I would like to visit you.” Then: “While I am there, we could...”
task response
You give a clear reason for the visit: you have one week off work.
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You give ideas for time together, such as seeing the sunrise and surfing.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has a clear start, middle, and end.
coherence and cohesion
You use some linking words, such as “First of all”, “after that”, and “because”.
The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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