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More and more people are working from home instead of going to an office. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend

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lncreasingly people tend to prefer working from home
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the workplace
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 essay will discuss the main positives
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 trend. One positive
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 of working online is that it can
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 on people’s well-being. What
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 individuals can
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 most
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 with their families and
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 their daily schedule more flexibly. So,
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 cause reduce stress and improve mental-health.
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, parents could look after their teenagers more
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easily
. Another benefit is saving
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. To illustrate, humans do not need to commute
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 lead to loseing of
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, people can work regardless of distance
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, they can start their worklife at
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 without delay and not
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 traffic congestion. Turning to disadvantages , one possible drawback is that
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 can encourage a sedentary lifestyle . To put it simply, since employees spend most of their day
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sitting in front of
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 , they may exercise less
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 can result in health problems
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 negative is social isolation. Workers have fewer face -to-face interactions.
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, they may feel lonely
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 some soft skills like communication and teamwork might be weaker.
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, new
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employees
 can struggle to build relationships with colleagues. In conclusion, despite these drawbacks to
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 tendency, there are
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upsides
 of working from distance
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 as not wasting
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to commute
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 and spending most of
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time
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the time
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family
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with family
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 members.

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Task response
Score: 6. Your answer is on topic and has enough main ideas. To get a higher score, explain each idea more fully. For example, say how less travel can give people more time for sleep, food, or family.
Task response
Make your end clearer. Say that working from home has both good and bad sides, then state which side is stronger, or say that it depends on the worker and the job.
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Use examples that are more full. For instance, explain how a new worker may find it hard to learn from others when they do not meet in the same place.
Coherence and cohesion
Score: 6. The four-part plan is easy to follow. However, some lines are hard to read because the word order is not clear. Keep sentences short and direct.
Coherence and cohesion
Make the main point of each paragraph clear in its first line. For example: 'Working from home can improve well-being.' Then explain it and give one example.
Coherence and cohesion
Use links in a more natural way. Do not use too many. Also, check that the link fits the idea. For example, write 'This can reduce stress' instead of 'So, this cause reduce stress'.
Task response
You answer both parts of the question. You give two good points for working from home and two bad points.
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Your ideas are clear and fit the topic, such as less travel time, more family time, less exercise, and feeling alone.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear order: start, good points, bad points, and end.
Coherence and cohesion
You use linking words well, for example: 'For example', 'Another benefit', 'As a result', and 'For instance'.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • productivity
  • commuting
  • flexibility
  • cost savings
  • remote work
  • office space
  • utilities
  • environmental benefits
  • carbon footprint
  • personal commitments
  • stress reduction
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