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The table below gives the information about the amount of tax collected (as % of GDP) in five countries for 4 years between 1975 and 2005. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The bar chart indicates the amount of tax collected, which is known as % of GDP of five different
countries
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,
according to
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 4 years from 1975 to 2005.
Overall
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, all of these four
countries
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 showed the increasing trend during th 20-years period, especially Sweden took up the
mafority
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majority
 of all
chart
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charts
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 during the timeline,
whereas
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 the other
countries
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 broke down the rise of
this
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 trend. In terms of ASEAN, Japan stood at the lowest point, at only 15% in 1975
,
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however
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, there was a
gradually
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gradual
 increase over the years and reached
it
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 peak at 32.1% in 2005. Korean
on the other hand
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,
showing
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 the fluctuation. It stood at just 15.1% in 1975, but there was a significant rise to 27% in 1985.
This
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 figure cannot
remained
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, it eventually
fluctutated
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fluctuated
 from 26% to 27.3%
at the end
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 of the period. Regarding other
countries
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, Sweden comprised the largest of all units, at 46% in 1975, the figure continued increasing during the times and dominated
of
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all others by 70.1% in 2005. Turkey illustrated the
gradually climbing
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gradual climb
 from 16.4% (1975) to 27.4% (2005), and the same trend was true for
USA
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the USA
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, which came from 25.1% in 1975 to 27.4% in 2005.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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