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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experiences.

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Nowadays, more and more
people
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becoming
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 interested
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in learning
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 about the
history
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 of the buildings and houses they live in.
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and explain
 how
people
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 can explore
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 a number of reasons why
people
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curious
 about researching the
history
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. One reason is that homeowners want to know whether their property has historical value. If they decide to sell their property, its historical value could help them ask for a higher price. Another reason is that some
people
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 may want to renovate their property. By researching the
history
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owners
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 may learn about the
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original
 design and any
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previous
 changes made to the building.
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 can help them plan
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damaging
 historical features. There are several ways to learn about the
history
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 of their house.
People
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 may visit local archives or ask older
neigbour
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neighbours
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previous
 owners.
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, websites may be helpful because
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 can contain houses geneology. From my experience, once, my family found an old photo album in an abandoned farmhouse that we had bought. The photo album contained
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 photos. We discovered that the house used to be a school. So, sometimes discovering old records may be the key. In conclusion, the rising interest in
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 houses they live in is connected with historical heritage
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 value.
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, it is crucial maintaing historical characteristics. In order to obtain
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people
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, people
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 may visit local or online resources.

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Task response
Score: 6. Give one more reason in more detail. For example, people may want to feel closer to the people who lived there before.
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Explain the research ways more fully. Say what people can find in old town records, maps, sale papers, or news stories.
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Make the last paragraph clearer. Say that people can use old records, local places, and online sources to learn about a home.
Coherence and cohesion
Score: 6. Keep one main idea in each paragraph. Your first body paragraph is about reasons, and your second is about ways; this is good. Add a clear topic sentence to each one.
Coherence and cohesion
Use links more carefully. For example: "As a result, they can plan the work better." This makes the link between history and repair work clearer.
Coherence and cohesion
Some sentences need clearer grammar, which can make the flow hard to follow. For example, write: "Nowadays, more and more people are becoming interested in learning about the history of the houses and buildings where they live."
Coherence and cohesion
Do not repeat "history" too often. You can also say "the past of the home" or "old records about the building".
Task response
You answer both parts: why people want to know, and how they can find out.
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Your ideas are clear: value when selling, help with repair work, old records, local archives, and older neighbours.
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The story about the old farm house is a good, real example and supports your point.
Coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, two main body parts, and an ending.
Coherence and cohesion
You use simple link words well, such as "One reason", "Another reason", "Also", "So", and "In conclusion".
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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