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The map below shows three possible locations for a leisure centre. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The
digram
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diagram
 displays three projected locations for a leisure centre.
Overall
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,all of the three locations are close
togather
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together
.
While
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 locations A and
B
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 are
constracted
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constructed
 by
bulidings
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buildings
,
location
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C
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 is the most suitable
location
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 because it is a free land with only a
trees
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few trees
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.
Location
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 A is located
in
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at
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 the bottom of the east part of the map at the north -west of
location
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B
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and
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, and
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 in nourth for
location
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C
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 .It is a factory
buliding
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building
 with
saperated
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separate
 parts, srrounded free land with a river from the
South-west
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southwest
.
Laocation
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Location
B
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located
Verb problem
is located
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 in the
middel
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middle
 of the map
in
Punctuation problem
, in
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 the north-west of
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location
Capitalize the proper name
Location
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B
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 and in the noth for
location
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C
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 .It is a residental buildings with three
saperated bulidings
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separate buildings
.
there
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There
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 are two roads
one
Punctuation problem
, one
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 on the front of the
location
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and
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, and
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 the other is in
east
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the east
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.
Location
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c
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C
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 is located in the west of the map
and
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,
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 in
east
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the east
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for
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of Location
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location
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B
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and
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, and
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 in north- west for
location
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 A. It is a free
location
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 with only trees there.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words b, location, c with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • commercial district
  • space constraints
  • costs
  • prime location
  • secluded
  • natural area
  • serene environment
  • remoteness
  • accessibility
  • transport facilities
  • advantageous
  • undisturbed leisure
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