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On a recent holiday you lost avaluable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter: -describe the item you lost -explain how you lost it -tell the insurance company what you would like them to do.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to formally report and make a claim under my travel insurance policy in relation to the loss of a valuable item during my recent holiday in Vancouver. The item in question is an Apple MacBook Air, which I purchased approximately six months ago. It is silver in colour and was stored in a black laptop bag. The device is valued at around CAD 1,500, and I have enclosed a copy of the purchase receipt as proof of ownership. The loss occurred
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 I was travelling by train from the airport to my hotel. Upon arrival, I discovered that I had inadvertently left my laptop bag in the overhead luggage compartment. I promptly contacted the railway company’s lost and found department;
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, despite their assistance, the item has not been recovered. As my policy includes coverage for personal belongings, I would be grateful if you could process my claim and arrange reimbursement for the value of the laptop. Please advise if any
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 documentation is required to support my application. I look forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Vishally Bhardwaj

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task response
Score: 8. Add your policy number and the date of the loss. This would make the claim feel more complete.
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You could say where you got off the train and the time, if you know it. This may help the company check the claim.
coherence and cohesion
Score: 8. The letter is easy to follow. You can make the last request even more direct: 'Please pay CAD 1,500 for the lost laptop.'
coherence and cohesion
Use simple links like 'First', 'Then', and 'Therefore' only if needed. Your paragraphs already work well.
task response
You answer all three parts: what you lost, how you lost it, and what you want the company to do.
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The letter is clear and polite. You give useful facts, such as the price, colour, and receipt.
coherence and cohesion
Your ideas are in a clear order: reason for writing, item, how it was lost, and your request.
coherence and cohesion
Each paragraph has one main point. The opening and ending are very good for a formal letter.
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